I think you're right here, Tad, just drop the word, & the implication
is clear. I agree that the turn at the end is neatly done....
Doug
On 12-Mar-08, at 8:59 AM, TheOldMole wrote:
> I'd stay away from testosterone as a synoym for male -- it's been
> overdone in recent years, and is it accurate? Isn't the production
> of testosterone associated with the onset of puberty?
>
> I like the way it ends, and I like how short it is. You'vce captured
> a moment, and glimpsed beyond that moment. I like that the stanza
> break moves us into the realization of the quid pro quo -- that she
> makes the wheel is her price of admission into the boys' game (as it
> would be, also, for the youngest boy, the one farthest away from the
> testosterone surge).
>
> Heather Taylor wrote:
>> Fox & Geese
>>
>> I was always one of the first
>> Stomping the ground
>> Flattening snow in a perfect wheel
>> Spokes radiating out from its core.
>>
>> Only boys played this, the boys and me
>> The unofficial member of the testosterone clan,
>> Circling each other in our game of fox catch goose
>> Sometimes me the pursuer, sometimes them
>> The thoughts of kisses left for other years.
>>
>>
>
> --
> Tad Richards
> http://www.opus40.org/tadrichards/
> http://opusforty.blogspot.com/
>
> The moral is this: in American verse,
> The better you are, the pay is worse.
> --Corey Ford
>
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