I'd stay away from testosterone as a synoym for male -- it's been
overdone in recent years, and is it accurate? Isn't the production of
testosterone associated with the onset of puberty?
I like the way it ends, and I like how short it is. You'vce captured a
moment, and glimpsed beyond that moment. I like that the stanza break
moves us into the realization of the quid pro quo -- that she makes the
wheel is her price of admission into the boys' game (as it would be,
also, for the youngest boy, the one farthest away from the testosterone
surge).
Heather Taylor wrote:
> Fox & Geese
>
> I was always one of the first
> Stomping the ground
> Flattening snow in a perfect wheel
> Spokes radiating out from its core.
>
> Only boys played this, the boys and me
> The unofficial member of the testosterone clan,
> Circling each other in our game of fox catch goose
> Sometimes me the pursuer, sometimes them
> The thoughts of kisses left for other years.
>
>
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Tad Richards
http://www.opus40.org/tadrichards/
http://opusforty.blogspot.com/
The moral is this: in American verse,
The better you are, the pay is worse.
--Corey Ford
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