Sharon
I wasn't convinced about the long lines, but they work well aloud. The
enjambments are good, too - I'm just not sure about 'Do you/hear it?'
Martin
> Whisper
>
> Listen. It's a new moon night. There is no light to be heard
> falling on fresh snow. Snow drifting down so quietly you hear
> nothing. Listen. Distant electric humming under the evening
> silence. A fountain trickles beneath the ice. Far away, geese
> call to one another across the slow river. Listen harder. Do you
> hear it? The crackling of stars, colliding starlight, high, higher,
> in the dimming, snow-speckled night. That hiss. That whisper.
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