Thanks for all the comments. In answer to some of them:
There are four separate citrus trees and I have pruned them all. I just
thought 'lime' fitted the rhythm.
No, my husband does not read poetryetc, not being a poet. (Are there *any*
couples on here? Poets seem rarely to come in pairs.) I don't usually write
poems about him, either. Come to think of it, I don't write much about my
personal life at all.
It would be easy to make the second stanza sound like the first,
rhythmically, but that would, I think, spoil the joke. The rhythm in the
second stanza is deliberately vague and messy. Maybe I need to make it more
obvious.
"While the cat's away" haha... it could be worse! His messy desk is
untouched, and I haven't thrown away any of his clothes. (He is away for
January on a drumming tour in Ghana, in case anyone cares.)
Janet
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