this is great. there are three things here that aren't obvious
bonuses, but good ones.
the "giant/tiny" juxtaposition is cool because spiders are at once
almost the smallest crawler around, but also generate illogical fear
in most.
the centering of the idea of perfection/quality/excellence/superiority
around something as little, hated, indifference-inducing as a spider;
but it also brings to mind that 'spider' is a very powerful word in
poetry, somehow. put it anywhere, it colours it with that spidery,
orbish tint. calling it a "target" is also fun, because the conception
is that spider's are constantly hunting or eating.
namelessness applies amazingly well to spiders. it's probably that the
fear they produce is so utterly small, and their size & mechanisms are
so utterly small, and its motion so unlike anything, that calling it
nameless just fits. faceless would be too frightening (& maybe too
nightmarishly abstract), formless would be exaggeration. great
midground. :)
I'm on the fence on whether applying desire to the spider suits the
rest of its demeanour here; should it be entirely devoid of
everything? but maybe its 'weakness' is hunger.
KS
On 14/03/07, Janet Jackson <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> Nameless
>
> One stunning orb.
> Best I've ever seen.
>
> Not symmetrical, not
> centred, not perfect:
> no giant hand made it,
> no tiny mind designed it.
>
> Shimmering elliptical target.
> Soundless nameless strands.
>
> Hidden spider not proud,
> just spider. Resting,
> worknight over, wanting
> not praise, but flies.
>
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> A draft by Janet Jackson
> Wed Mar 14 11:40:10 WST 2007
>
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> Janet Jackson <[log in to unmask]>
> Poems at Proximity:
> http://www.proximity.webhop.net
>
> The choice is between nonviolence and nonexistence.
> Martin Luther King Jr.
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