I like this and would really like it if the last stanza were deleted.
It seems so weak after the rest.
The first line is fine with me. It sets the mood.
Janet
> It's a minor thing, but a space went missing before. Here is the correct
> version:
>
> it's a lyrical day
(etc)
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Janet Jackson <[log in to unmask]>
Poems at Proximity:
http://www.proximity.webhop.net
The choice is between nonviolence and nonexistence.
Martin Luther King Jr.
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