YES it's rather limp and cute, isn't it. It was there before the guts of
the snap, and should have gone. Problem of mine, niceness. This will be
one to keep having a scrape at.
As always, thank you for the reading
caleb
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poetics [mailto:[log in to unmask]] On Behalf Of kasper salonen
Sent: Friday, 9 March 2007 6:16 AM
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Subject: Re: Snap - In the south southwest
ah, will have to agree. I thought 'watch' was 'match' & was intrigued.
haha.
KS
On 08/03/07, andrew burke <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> I'd drop the last stanza - not needeed and flat.
>
> On 07/03/07, Caleb Cluff <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> >
> > Is that the curvature of the earth you say
> > watching the flaring lights of planes somewhere
> > in the south
> > southwest
> > pointed.
> >
> > I can't answer
> > I don't know
> > I can lie
> > not lie so much
> > make something up that makes me
> > seem to know
> >
> > somewhere in the night something is scratching
> > what is that you say
> > why it's a dumb-show
> > a fantoccini
> >
> > of flies
> >
> > see how the one holds his forelegs
> > over the eyes of the
> > other so tender
> >
> > corkscrewing into the air about them
> >
> > let them pull the full breath of this air outwards
> > as an accordion's bellow might push
> > into the brest of the horizon
> > and sound and sight swell and meet
> > and the world's womb is made lavish and sated
> > seated in a theatre of strings
> >
> > all I can say
> > is that things happen in the sky
> > and we can watch them.
> >
> > Melbourne
> > 7/03/07
> >
> >
> >
> >
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