Kasper says
> "... without myth" is splendid.
I agree.
> the rest is unconnected & uninviting (though the imagery bits are clear &
> good).
It is hard to make a connection between the final stanza and the rest --
between the nature images and the people (beings?) and room.
The word "graceless" seems to be the key.
I wouldn't call it "uninviting" though. The reader is invited to find a
connection in their own way.
Janet
>
> On 01/02/07, Caleb Cluff <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> >
> > Am I so graceless, unable to see
> > at the first cautious whisper of rain,
> >
> > how the gum offers slight green gossip,
> >
> > how the dung beetle, anthracite teardrop,
> > goes about his task without myth,
> >
> > how your eternal face fell
> > as we left the room.
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Poems at Proximity:
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The choice is between nonviolence and nonexistence.
Martin Luther King Jr.
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