likewise to read later Ken. am impressed by the sheer dedication/length.
KS
On 09/01/07, Caleb Cluff <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>
> I've put it away to read later. I feel as though I'm going to enjoy it,
> but I need there to be some quiet first. Really looking forward to it.
>
> Cal
>
> -----Original Message-----
> From: Poetryetc provides a venue for a dialogue relating to poetry and
> poetics [mailto:[log in to unmask]] On Behalf Of Kenneth Wolman
> Sent: Tuesday, 9 January 2007 8:35 AM
> To: [log in to unmask]
> Subject: Re: "Un bacio. Un altro bacio. Ancora un bacio"
>
> Jon Corelis wrote:
> > These are wild and whirling words.
> >
> > It's got some good parts, but I think it needs more structure to be
> readable.
> >
> > Historical niggle: Eros in ancient Greek art is (always, if I
> remember
> > right) portrayed with a dinky dingus. I think you mean satyrs.
> >
> > Suggested preface quote: "I'd give it all up for one erection." --
> Groucho
> > Marx at 81.
> >
>
> Heh. It is too long. I read it over this morning after the flush faded
>
> (I was in some kind of zone late yesterday, other than combat), and
> whenever I asked myself "Why did I write that? how did it get there?" I
> know I have a candidate for Dr. Ken's Guillotine. Yes, I have my own
> selection of incoherent moments...no, that may be wrong. I'm not sure
> it actually goes into incoherency, but--like those lovers--passages may
> go out of the poem and somewhere else. Maybe next time I can get to
> Puccini.
>
> I'd rather overwrite by 3 pages. Cutting is almost pleasurable: "Hmmm,
> there goes year 7, year 4, and that rubber tree plant."
>
> I didn't know the Eros deal. Why would the god of Erotic love be (ahem)
>
> underrepresented? Satyrs I can understand. Oooo, can I have fun with
> this....
>
> Alas, povero Groucho, missing by only a few years the Advent
> (capitalization deliberate) of the three Magi: Levitra, Cialis, and
> Viagra.
>
> Thank you, Jon. Long time since the days of Apollo Poets. I've never
> really solicited comments (impolite?) but this is one that cost me a
> lot. I started it while I was still married. It's outlasted that, and
> much else. HELP.
>
> Ken
>
> --
> --------------------
> Ken Wolman andreachenier.net rainermaria.typepad.com
>
> DO NOT ADJUST YOUR MIND: IT IS REALITY THAT IS MALFUNCTIONING
>
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