kasper, just a quick note that i value your pointed and serious critiques.
i value everyone else's, too --
& always feel a bit guilty because i know i receive much more than i give on
this list.
On 10/26/06, kasper salonen <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>
> final line is falccid-dramatic. fullstops after short lines repeated
> are drama queens.
> the rest is lovely though. quite empty really, but that's possibly the
> point.
>
> KS
>
> On 26/10/06, sharon brogan <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> > >
> > > Cat on my shoulder,
> > > dog at my knee, I live
> > > amidst amulets, icons,
> > >
> > > paintings by unknown
> > > artists, carvings by
> > > Indonesian strangers,
> > >
> > > figures that invoke
> > > religions that are not
> > > mine; spirit that is.
> > >
> > > Leaves come down
> > > in a clatter of color.
> > > The windchimes ring.
> > >
> >
> > --
> > ~ SB =^..^=
> >
> > http://www.sbpoet.com
> >
>
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~ SB =^..^=
http://www.sbpoet.com
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