Kasper, Judy,
Thank you both very much. I'm glad that you like it.
I must remember to drink more red wine - some news headlines today claim
that it's good for the brain.
:)
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From: "Kasper" <[log in to unmask]>
To: <[log in to unmask]>
Sent: Tuesday, August 29, 2006 5:10 AM
Subject: Re: best part of a bottle T - a poem
> "millennial reverberations" seems awfully grand a description for so
> minimalistic a piece, I wouldn't charactarise it quite like that
> myself. it's very whole & skilfully simple, & has a rhythm that
> soothes the piece itself without slowing it down. the enjambment
> accounts for much of that, very apt. "delicate as a rapier" is very,
> very feminine to me, or descriptive of a type of femininity. :) a
> cruel but dainty (& possibly vulnerable) type.
> "bent by small embarrassments" is fantastic too. it illumines a
> psychology in the whole little undefined scene. the final lines seem
> separated from the rest, & though connecting them isn't a feat because
> there is a relevance to be sensed, it requires a mild sort of
> thoughtful consciousness.
>
> great work Tina. :)
>
> K S
>
> On 27/08/06, judy prince <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>> A lovely fragile-strong poem, Tina.
>>
>> "delicate as a rapier" and "bent by small embarrassments -- she dips her
>> head" --- especially fine.
>>
>> Others poems you've sent in, as well, offer unique portraits of surface
>> appearances and their actual foundations. I sense in this poem millenial
>> reverberations, themes of ages.
>>
>> Judy
>>
>> ----- Original Message -----
>> From: "Tina Bass" <[log in to unmask]>
>> To: <[log in to unmask]>
>> Sent: Saturday, August 26, 2006 6:01 PM
>> Subject: best part of a bottle T - a poem
>>
>>
>>
>> delicate as a rapier
>>
>> she walks.
>>
>> the Frenchman breathes
>>
>> his words in
>>
>> 'ah, a lady' and
>>
>> bent by
>>
>> small embarrassments -
>>
>> she dips her head
>>
>>
>>
>> exposure as a freak
>>
>> presumes no tenderness
>>
>>
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