"millennial reverberations" seems awfully grand a description for so
minimalistic a piece, I wouldn't charactarise it quite like that
myself. it's very whole & skilfully simple, & has a rhythm that
soothes the piece itself without slowing it down. the enjambment
accounts for much of that, very apt. "delicate as a rapier" is very,
very feminine to me, or descriptive of a type of femininity. :) a
cruel but dainty (& possibly vulnerable) type.
"bent by small embarrassments" is fantastic too. it illumines a
psychology in the whole little undefined scene. the final lines seem
separated from the rest, & though connecting them isn't a feat because
there is a relevance to be sensed, it requires a mild sort of
thoughtful consciousness.
great work Tina. :)
K S
On 27/08/06, judy prince <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> A lovely fragile-strong poem, Tina.
>
> "delicate as a rapier" and "bent by small embarrassments -- she dips her
> head" --- especially fine.
>
> Others poems you've sent in, as well, offer unique portraits of surface
> appearances and their actual foundations. I sense in this poem millenial
> reverberations, themes of ages.
>
> Judy
>
> ----- Original Message -----
> From: "Tina Bass" <[log in to unmask]>
> To: <[log in to unmask]>
> Sent: Saturday, August 26, 2006 6:01 PM
> Subject: best part of a bottle T - a poem
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> delicate as a rapier
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> she walks.
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> the Frenchman breathes
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> his words in
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> 'ah, a lady' and
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> bent by
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> small embarrassments -
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> she dips her head
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> exposure as a freak
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> presumes no tenderness
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