Thanks Doug, I am very aware about the commas (honest!) I deliberately
presented the piece in first draft (in that respect)
The idea of the lines you excerpt is very much focused on their rhythm. As
well as a psyche stripped bare. Now as for angels, in popular culture,
that's interesting, partly of course because angels are a part of popular
culture without a doubt, but I take it you're thinking of making angels fey,
like extra-terrestrials in a Spielberg movie, cute and wise. I always think
of them in a Rilkean sense, y'know, 'each and every angel is terrible'.
Best
Dave
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----- Original Message -----
From: "Douglas Barbour" <[log in to unmask]>
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Sent: Friday, December 21, 2001 3:39 PM
Subject: Re: Pome
> David
>
> I too read the poem, but while finding it interesting, did not have
> anything (what they call in SF fandom) 'sercon' to say about it. I think
> I'd go along with Peter about the commas, and stick with you on that
>
> and in slow fucks
>
> And long rhythms
>
> which I thought worked especially well rhythmically.
>
> I just *hate what's been done to 'angels' in recent pop culture, so will
> think of yours along the lines of Benjamin's, one I do believe, sadly,
in...
>
> Doug
>
> Douglas Barbour
> Department of English
> University of Alberta
> Edmonton Alberta Canada T6G 2E5
> (h) [780] 436 3320 (b) [780] 492 0521
> http://www.ualberta.ca/~dbarbour/dbhome.htm
>
> I can always
> go back to
> fertilization,
> kimonos, wrap-
> arounds and
> diatribes.
> Lorine Niedecker
>
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