David
I too read the poem, but while finding it interesting, did not have
anything (what they call in SF fandom) 'sercon' to say about it. I think
I'd go along with Peter about the commas, and stick with you on that
and in slow fucks
And long rhythms
which I thought worked especially well rhythmically.
I just *hate what's been done to 'angels' in recent pop culture, so will
think of yours along the lines of Benjamin's, one I do believe, sadly, in...
Doug
Douglas Barbour
Department of English
University of Alberta
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I can always
go back to
fertilization,
kimonos, wrap-
arounds and
diatribes.
Lorine Niedecker
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