> Dear Erminia,
> What if you simply ended your poem here:
> -fp
>
> (Diving II)
>
> "I want him to win ( me ) "
>
> 5 seconds and he disappears
> into my depths
> good entry fine push fresh
> he jumps off the platform very deep high
> after a single twist
> with such a balance moving through
> spaces of crowds of stillness
>
> wet muscles juvenile
> hips this one standing on his tips
> the arms stretched out hanging up in his perfected
> posture
> after the initial wobble
> clear entry
> oh,
> enter me
Great!!! I love it like that. It is much better.
I totally accept the suggestion.
I will tell Hugh.
Thank you,
(I need help with my English anyhow!)
cio-ino
Erminia
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