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Dear L 'It's not an architect's report, dear boy' such a wonderful put down!!!cheers deboyed 'interesting that the poems have been ironed out by forwarding those nice space bit all gone looks quite different in your original flattened my poems tend to be flattened I must explore layout technique more myself I was looking at the poems as a painter -diptych and was trying to relate them (in my umble opinion) better For me the first poem worked better than the second -who know's why????? > L analysis analysis?? Bloody academics:-) 'lovely Has a feel of a setting notes for making a film -for me first > one worked better in what way? By reading the bloody thing!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Have good weekend where are you now Goldsmith's left behind?? Out on the coast? Kernowing? Ps Am reading a fascinating book 'We The Drowned' Carsten Jensen some bits remind me of your 'Cornish' poems -----Original Message----- From: Poetryetc: poetry and poetics [mailto:[log in to unmask]] On Behalf Of Lawrence Upton Sent: 02 September 2011 09:24 To: [log in to unmask] Subject: Re: Landscape diptych Dear P > L lovely Has a feel of a setting notes for making a film -for me first > one worked better in what way? > -would have liked to link more if diptych(I spelt it!) if....? > Both walls stone ? same wall? Although beach in second is wet? It's not an architect's report, dear boy L > Enough ramblings from me -much sun on head today- > P-sunned > > > -----Original Message----- > From: Poetryetc: poetry and poetics [mailto:[log in to unmask]] On > Behalf Of Lawrence Upton > Sent: 01 September 2011 09:13 > To: [log in to unmask] > Subject: Landscape diptych > > > dry-stone wall and cat > > mist has the bay one-sided > > dry beach heard ocean > > > > > > > > unfinished wall with tipped up cat wobbling > > mist holds the one side bay > > birds' howl > > > ocean heard > > > wet sand, bricks > > > > ----- > UNFRAMED GRAPHICS by Lawrence Upton > 42 pages; A5 paperback; colour cover > Writers Forum 978 1 84254 277 4 > wfuk.org.uk/blog ---- > Lawrence Upton > Dept of Music > Goldsmiths, University of London > > ----- UNFRAMED GRAPHICS by Lawrence Upton 42 pages; A5 paperback; colour cover Writers Forum 978 1 84254 277 4 wfuk.org.uk/blog ---- Lawrence Upton Dept of Music Goldsmiths, University of London