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This is exquisite, K! Please don't change anything unless you meditate about it for a week! OK, now we petc folk need to talk seriously about a printed POETRYETC collection. Tell me how you came to this revision. It will help me and the millions who peek in on petc from time to time, though we may not know they're peeking. Judy 2008/10/3 kasper salonen <[log in to unmask]> > oh sorry. it's the same link as before, I just edit it there.: > http://docs.google.com/Doc?id=dfr8jjpv_79k95xpsj8 > > KS > > 2008/10/3 Judy Prince <[log in to unmask]> > > > K, I don't know where the edit is---or is it still being done? > > J > > > > 2008/10/3 kasper salonen <[log in to unmask]> > > > > > there's an edit, I think the is's & are's might still be in transit but > > the > > > rest is better I think. > > > > > > KS > > > > > > 2008/10/1 kasper salonen <[log in to unmask]> > > > > > > > thanks Doug & Judy for the great advice. verbs are little ruffians > that > > > > sometimes need extracating. underway! > > > > > > > > KS > > > > > > > > 2008/10/1 Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]> > > > > > > > > Kasper > > > >> > > > >> I somewhat second Judy, but also wonder if you can rid the piece of > > the > > > >> 'is's & 'are's, get those lines out of the somewhat passive sense. > > > >> > > > >> the colours shine... > > > >> > > > >> Doug > > > >> > > > >> On 30-Sep-08, at 4:49 AM, kasper salonen wrote: > > > >> > > > >> disregard that earlier version, it's got more of a form now. here: > > > >>> http://docs.google.com/Doc?id=dfr8jjpv_79k95xpsj8 > > > >>> > > > >>> KS > > > >>> > > > >>> > > > >> Douglas Barbour > > > >> [log in to unmask] > > > >> > > > >> http://www.ualberta.ca/~dbarbour/< > http://www.ualberta.ca/%7Edbarbour/>< > > http://www.ualberta.ca/%7Edbarbour/> > > > >> > > > >> Latest books: > > > >> Continuations (with Sheila E Murphy) > > > >> http://www.uap.ualberta.ca/UAP.asp?LID=41&bookID=664 > > > >> Wednesdays' > > > >> > > > >> > > > > > > http://abovegroundpress.blogspot.com/2008/03/new-from-aboveground-press_10.html > > > >> > > > >> bleary with hashish at a ghazal dud show > > > >> in Kurdistan, soaring Muslim melodies > > > >> over a smoked-out Jamaican one drop > > > >> > > > >> Brian Francis Slattery > > > >> > > > > > > > > > > > > > >