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Ken - I've read this one a few times now and think maybe you don';t need the dog barking at your voice angle. It stands less distracted without it. Sometimes how a poem starts if a smoke screen for what it's really about, like some dreams. Just my thoughts. Its meaty and worth working on. Andrew On 22/11/06, Kenneth Wolman <[log in to unmask]> wrote: > ...WHEREIN THE DOGS ANSWER YOUR PHONE > > My voice sends your dogs into raving fits. > Identification is a terrible thing to waste. > > You wrote to me of the suicide > you once loved >