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Anny, you have been given bad advice in my opinion | > and i want to see the sun | > every morning through my windows | > and the smell of the breeze moving each crispy petal | > of the flowers i've planted around the pond | > | > and follow the slow movement of the moon | > in its long trip through the stars | > let it slide in the dark in all its forms | > and listen to the jumping water of creeks | > | > | and the verb in the first line of that stanza should be in the | infinitive, "to follow." Otherwise, a charming poem. *Should? Oh dear. It *is in the infinitive, without its "to", the "to" understood from the "to" of "to see", as well as having a degree of the imperative, see below, and quite a bit that's indefinable as *I read it, and I shan't say anyone "should", the person in the poem is getting taken up by the uttered experience - so that he / she doesn't say "to smell" but rather the exclamatory "and the smell" - and *that _the_ can be taken partly as demonstrative which brings in the implied presence of another; so that "and follow" becomes both a colloquial slurring of "to follow" and an imperative to that other, whomaybe the i of the poem objectified by that i I think "and follow" is fine L