Thanks, Pat, Doug.
Pat, I just thought to break it up a bit and tercet form or couplets didn't
seem to fit here. Doug, I wanted to focus on how the head, usually the
thinker, the contemplator, the home to expressions, now becoming a brute
battering ram and just,another body part.
Now retitled,
Dive.
Hurtling into hard matter
The shock of penetration.
Joined fingers pierce first
but it's the head,
that necked noggin
usually reserved
for nutting out,
housing expressions,
now the chief impactor,
smacking into flat wet.
The noise, the back-thrust
the present intense
before torso and limbs
catch up.
You've done it.
Let go. You're in
another zone,
limbs now milling liquidly.
Familiar earth
deliberately abandoned
for unbreathable water.
Bill
On Thu, 2 Mar 2017 at 3:04 AM, Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> Fun, Bill
>
> but I’m not sure of the tone of
>
> that necked noggin
> usually reserved
> for nutting out,
>
> against the rest. Also felt like you might be able to do more with the
> sense of body-as-rocket I felt emerging there…?
>
> Doug
> > On Feb 28, 2017, at 2:15 PM, Bill Wootton <[log in to unmask]>
> wrote:
> >
> > Hurtling into hard matter
> > The shock of penetration
> > Joined fingers pierce
> > but it's the head,
> > that necked noggin
> > usually reserved
> > for nutting out,
> > housing expressions,
> > now the chief impactor,
> > smacking into flat wet.
> > First dive into still pool.
> >
> > The noise, the back-thrust
> > the intense present
> > before torso and limbs
> > catch up.
> > You've done it.
> > Let go.
> > You're in
> > another zone.
> >
> > Fears faced.
> > Familiar earth
> > deliberately abandoned
> > for unbreathable water.
> >
> > bw
>
> Douglas Barbour
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