Yes, I like the first one - but would argue with the term 'haiku' for them.
Haiku is more than form. But that's an argument for another day!
Andrew
On Thu, 29 Aug 2019 at 00:36, Sheila Murphy <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> really love that first one, Bill. These are nice! Sheila
>
> On Wed, Aug 28, 2019 at 9:18 AM Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]>
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> > I like them both, Bill, but feel the first keeps its mystery while th 2nd
> > slides a bit into didactic in the final lineā¦
> >
> > Doug
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> > > On Aug 27, 2019, at 8:28 PM, Bill Wootton <[log in to unmask]>
> > wrote:
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> > > What if waves,
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> > > seeing the shore,
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> > > decide not to break
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> > > Foaming lines erupt
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> > > from billowing depths
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> > > - fresh ideas
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> > Recent publications: (With Sheila E Murphy) Continuations & Continuations
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> > Recording Dates (Rubicon Press).
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