Thanks, Jill. I suppose I thought by including the definite article, it
nails it more to a particular time of observation.
Bill
On Thu, 20 Dec 2018 at 12:23 pm, Jill Jones <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> Hi Bill,
> Yes, this moves nicely, very butterfly-ish.
>
> I do like the spring/flickering sonic connection
>
> I still wonder if you need 'the'.
> Thanks,Jill
>
> ___________________________________________Jill Jones
>
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> Subject:Re: lightweight haiku
>
> Thanks, Sheila.
>
> Amended slightly now:
>
> spring lightweight
>
> in the flickering sun
>
> - a butterfly
>
> bw
>
> 19.12.18
>
> On Wed, 19 Dec 2018 at 11:23 am, Sheila Murphy
> wrote:
>
> > lovely, Bill. Thank you!
> >
> > On Tue, Dec 18, 2018 at 4:04 PM Bill Wootton
> > wrote:
> >
> > > spring lightweight
> > >
> > > in flickering sun
> > >
> > > - butterfly
> > >
> > >
> > > bw
> > >
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