... and Doug, I am getting your typo disease. first, dash.
Bill
On Thu, 15 Nov 2018 at 8:56 am, Bill Wootton <[log in to unmask]>
wrote:
> Cutting and pasting did that, Barry. Here goes again. Tried a full stop to
> close the firs line but it seemed to arrest the fluidity. A dsh seemed too
> bald. Anyway, now I need a new title. Thanks, Sheila too, for your
> encouragement.
>
> Such a fluid thing ...
> in dreams and memories
>
> people seem so preoccupied,
> going about their business.
>
> What’s mine?
>
> Bill
>
> On Thu, 15 Nov 2018 at 6:05 am, Barry Alpert <
> [log in to unmask]> wrote:
>
>> Almost, Bill. I can even imagine no extra space between lines 1 & 2 nor
>> lines 3 & 4. Simulating couplets before the turn. Now I wonder about
>> punctuation within the first 4 lines. Barry
>>
>> On Wed, 14 Nov 2018 20:46:06 +1100, Bill Wootton <
>> [log in to unmask]> wrote:
>>
>> >So ...
>> >
>> >Such a fluid thing
>> >
>> >in dreams and memories
>> >
>> >
>> >people seem so preoccupied
>> >
>> >going about their business
>> >
>> >
>> >What’s mine?
>> >
>> >
>> >Is this what you are suggesting, Barry? Can see merit if so but not sure
>> >about the preposition use in line 2.
>> >
>> >
>> >Bill
>> >
>> >On Wed, 14 Nov 2018 at 2:13 pm, Barry Alpert <
>> >[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>> >
>> >> Bill, After a number of readings, I've decided to take the title as the
>> >> first line in a single-spaced unit with "in dreams and memories". Then
>> >> double-spacing between units and the current lines 2 & 3 as another
>> unit. A
>> >> final double-space between stanzas and then your final line. Barry
>> >>
>> >> On Tue, 13 Nov 2018 17:07:42 -0700, Sheila Murphy <
>> [log in to unmask]>
>> >> wrote:
>> >>
>> >> >The question of questions, Bill. A brave one.
>> >> >
>> >> >On Tue, Nov 13, 2018, 4:42 PM Bill Wootton <[log in to unmask]
>> >> wrote:
>> >> >
>> >> >> In dreams and memories
>> >> >>
>> >> >> people seem so preoccupied
>> >> >>
>> >> >> going about their business
>> >> >>
>> >> >> What’s mine?
>> >> >>
>> >> >>
>> >> >> bw
>> >> >>
>> >> >> 14.11.18
>> >> >>
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