Almost, Bill. I can even imagine no extra space between lines 1 & 2 nor lines 3 & 4. Simulating couplets before the turn. Now I wonder about punctuation within the first 4 lines. Barry
On Wed, 14 Nov 2018 20:46:06 +1100, Bill Wootton <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>So ...
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>Such a fluid thing
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>in dreams and memories
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>people seem so preoccupied
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>going about their business
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>What’s mine?
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>Is this what you are suggesting, Barry? Can see merit if so but not sure
>about the preposition use in line 2.
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>
>Bill
>
>On Wed, 14 Nov 2018 at 2:13 pm, Barry Alpert <
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>> Bill, After a number of readings, I've decided to take the title as the
>> first line in a single-spaced unit with "in dreams and memories". Then
>> double-spacing between units and the current lines 2 & 3 as another unit. A
>> final double-space between stanzas and then your final line. Barry
>>
>> On Tue, 13 Nov 2018 17:07:42 -0700, Sheila Murphy <[log in to unmask]>
>> wrote:
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>> >The question of questions, Bill. A brave one.
>> >
>> >On Tue, Nov 13, 2018, 4:42 PM Bill Wootton <[log in to unmask]
>> wrote:
>> >
>> >> In dreams and memories
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>> >> people seem so preoccupied
>> >>
>> >> going about their business
>> >>
>> >> What’s mine?
>> >>
>> >>
>> >> bw
>> >>
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