Hi Bill,
I do like the almost fugitive feeling of the poem - it's short lines
and continual turning. This particularly works well in the first part.
I like the idea of sticking with the otherworldliness. Maybe you don't
need those first two lines in the second. Just a thought
Cheers,
Jill
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Subject:Fox
*Fox*
1
The thing is,
can you even be sure
you saw it?
That even-haunched
cool stepper,
intent
as a gunslinger.
Now definitely
not there.
2
Despite dog dimensions
he moves undoglike-ly
An otherworld visitor
daintily trotting
from eucalypt shade
down earth's stony path
splayed tail almost
independent accomplice
From where does all that
red swagger spring?
bw
18.4.18
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