Ah, thanks all. For me, the beckoning hand was in the carriage or limousine door, & the alley was an escape route…
Hmmnnn…
Doug
> On Apr 12, 2018, at 3:13 AM, Patrick McManus <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>
> Eek it outside my place now six horses in my cul de sac tricky
>
> not sure about the last verse isn't the hand beckoning in?? for a final trip?
>
>
> On 11/04/2018 19:30, Sheila Murphy wrote:
>> Doug, this is a strong image followed by a far-preferred suggestion that
>> captures the focus. The better choice.
>>
>> Thank you! Sheila
>>
>> On Wed, Apr 11, 2018 at 10:50 AM, Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]>
>> wrote:
>>
>>> an ancient black carriage
>>> its six white horses
>>> or a modern stretch limousine
>>>
>>> a door opening
>>> a beckoning hand
>>>
>>> just step aside into this alley
>>> for another few years
>>>
>>> that’s the way to go
>>>
>>>
>>> Douglas Barbour
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>>>
>>> Recent publications: (With Sheila E Murphy) Continuations & Continuations
>>> 2 (UofAPress).
>>> Recording Dates (Rubicon Press).
>>> Listen. If (UofAPress):
>>>
>>>
>>> There is no real
>>> world, my friends.
>>> Why not, then
>>> let the stars
>>> shine in our bones?
>>>
>>> Robert Kroetsch
>>>
Douglas Barbour
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Recent publications: (With Sheila E Murphy) Continuations & Continuations 2 (UofAPress).
Recording Dates (Rubicon Press).
Listen. If (UofAPress):
There is no real
world, my friends.
Why not, then
let the stars
shine in our bones?
Robert Kroetsch
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