what about them?
L
On 8 November 2017 at 17:42, Patrick McManus <[log in to unmask]>
wrote:
> shame that the rich do not enrich our soils but tax havens ??
>
>
> On 08/11/2017 15:30, Lawrence Upton wrote:
>
>> I understand.
>>
>> I tried to second guess it but could not...
>>
>> I think I'll sidestep "now". I have been trying to avoid its affectionate
>> embrace through several other poems today. But what about "And", the
>> biblical and rather than the comma substitute?
>>
>> I'll think on this and make my final.... my new version on Thursday or
>> Friday
>>
>> Thank you for the thought
>>
>>
>> L
>>
>>
>>
>>
>>
>> On 8 November 2017 at 15:17, Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]>
>> wrote:
>>
>> Not looking carefully, L. I meant ‘Now’ for ‘Yet’. Sorry. )I’d like to
>>> claim ‘typo,’ but it’s just plain dumb.)
>>>
>>> D
>>>
>>>> On Nov 8, 2017, at 8:15 AM, Lawrence Upton <[log in to unmask]>
>>>>
>>> wrote:
>>>
>>>> Your inferences are almost certainly correct, Sir.
>>>> & I am open to suggestions. My difficulty is that the word "if" does not
>>>> occur in my poem.
>>>>
>>>> ?
>>>>
>>>> L
>>>>
>>>> On 8 November 2017 at 15:08, Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]>
>>>>
>>> wrote:
>>>
>>>> Ah, yes, I like some implied ironies there, Lawrence (well, I infer
>>>>>
>>>> such),
>>>
>>>> as well as the stated possibilities. (I wonder if another ‘Now’ instead
>>>>>
>>>> of
>>>
>>>> ‘If’ in the final stanza would hit a bit harder?)
>>>>>
>>>>> Doug
>>>>>
>>>>>> On Nov 8, 2017, at 2:26 AM, Lawrence Upton <[log in to unmask]>
>>>>>>
>>>>> wrote:
>>>>>
>>>>>> We've made revolution!
>>>>>>
>>>>>> Now we have a vision,
>>>>>>
>>>>>> we'll surely come to good.
>>>>>>
>>>>>>
>>>>>>
>>>>>> We had been doing much
>>>>>>
>>>>>> who were put to make goods
>>>>>>
>>>>>> which made few others rich.
>>>>>>
>>>>>>
>>>>>>
>>>>>> Those rich are not like us.
>>>>>>
>>>>>> Not now. Not any more.
>>>>>>
>>>>>> Each one of them is changed.
>>>>>>
>>>>>>
>>>>>>
>>>>>> Yet they enrich soils,
>>>>>>
>>>>>> doing something for *us*,
>>>>>>
>>>>>> with no effort-making.
>>>>>>
>>>>> Douglas Barbour
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>>>>> https://eclecticruckus.wordpress.com/
>>>>>
>>>>> Recent publications: (With Sheila E Murphy) Continuations &
>>>>>
>>>> Continuations
>>>
>>>> 2 (UofAPress).
>>>>> Recording Dates (Rubicon Press).
>>>>> Listen. If (UofAPress):
>>>>>
>>>>> There was the usual amount of corruption, intimidation, and rioting.
>>>>>
>>>>> Sir Charles Petrie
>>>>>
>>>>> Douglas Barbour
>>> [log in to unmask]
>>> https://eclecticruckus.wordpress.com/
>>>
>>> Recent publications: (With Sheila E Murphy) Continuations & Continuations
>>> 2 (UofAPress).
>>> Recording Dates (Rubicon Press).
>>> Listen. If (UofAPress):
>>>
>>>
>>> There was the usual amount of corruption, intimidation, and rioting.
>>>
>>> Sir Charles Petrie
>>>
>>>
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