Your inferences are almost certainly correct, Sir.
& I am open to suggestions. My difficulty is that the word "if" does not
occur in my poem.
?
L
On 8 November 2017 at 15:08, Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> Ah, yes, I like some implied ironies there, Lawrence (well, I infer such),
> as well as the stated possibilities. (I wonder if another ‘Now’ instead of
> ‘If’ in the final stanza would hit a bit harder?)
>
> Doug
> > On Nov 8, 2017, at 2:26 AM, Lawrence Upton <[log in to unmask]>
> wrote:
> >
> > We've made revolution!
> >
> > Now we have a vision,
> >
> > we'll surely come to good.
> >
> >
> >
> > We had been doing much
> >
> > who were put to make goods
> >
> > which made few others rich.
> >
> >
> >
> > Those rich are not like us.
> >
> > Not now. Not any more.
> >
> > Each one of them is changed.
> >
> >
> >
> > Yet they enrich soils,
> >
> > doing something for *us*,
> >
> > with no effort-making.
>
> Douglas Barbour
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> Recent publications: (With Sheila E Murphy) Continuations & Continuations
> 2 (UofAPress).
> Recording Dates (Rubicon Press).
> Listen. If (UofAPress):
>
> There was the usual amount of corruption, intimidation, and rioting.
>
> Sir Charles Petrie
>
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