The 2nd & 3rd stanzas work really well, Bill; I wasn’t sure about ‘creasing’, nor about how old the daughter is, when they're ‘springing’…
Doug
> On Jun 21, 2017, at 2:37 AM, Bill Wootton <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
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> No, Andrew, more as Patrick observed, the girl learning, on the job, I
> suppose.
>
> Bill
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> On Wed, 21 Jun 2017 at 6:21 pm, Andrew Burke <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
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>> What's the full impact of the image, Bill? Is she an ex bikie's girl?
>>
>> Andrew
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>> On 21 June 2017 at 15:51, Patrick McManus <[log in to unmask]>
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>>> cheers Bill image there of girl learning !
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>>> On 20/06/2017 23:22, Bill Wootton wrote:
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>>>> Springing along
>>>> Sunshine Beach Road,
>>>> daughter in hand,
>>>> the young mother
>>>> suddenly feints left,
>>>> features creasing.
>>>>
>>>> The loud report,
>>>> a car backfiring,
>>>> quickly fades
>>>>
>>>> but not before
>>>> the daughter
>>>> has mimicked exactly
>>>> her mother's movements.
>>>>
>>>> bw
>>>>
>>>
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