See what others think, P.
Bill
Hurt
Johnny Cash
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Lyrics
I hurt myself today
To see if I still feel
I focus on the pain
The only thing that's real
The needle tears a hole
The old familiar sting
Try to kill it all away
But I remember everything
What have I become
My sweetest friend
Everyone I know goes away
In the end
And you could have it all
My empire of dirt
I will let you down
I will make you hurt
I wear this crown of thorns
Upon my liar's chair
Full of broken thoughts
I cannot repair
Beneath the stains of time
The feelings disappear
You are someone else
I am still right here
What have I become
My sweetest friend
Everyone I know goes away
In the end
And you could have it all
My empire of dirt
I will let you down
I will make you hurt
If I could start again
A million miles away
I would keep myself
I would find a way
Songwriter: Trent Reznor
Hurt lyrics © Kobalt Music Publishing Ltd.
On Fri, 7 Apr 2017 at 4:32 pm, Patrick McManus <
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> yes it is interesting that the first line is a distraction for me -def
> tricky for this old head -perhaps I have listened to too much Johnny
> Cash -I have seen before this can happen in other poems of course it can
> be used intentionally like 'what have the xxxxd one for us?'cheers P
> freezing outside this morning
>
>
> On 06/04/2017 23:19, Bill Wootton wrote:
> > Yes, Doug. The Man in Black may be in country trash heaven but never a
> > Yikes man.
> >
> > Bill
> >
> > On Fri, 7 Apr 2017 at 5:38 am, Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]>
> wrote:
> >
> >> And the ‘Yikes!’ definitely keeps it from entering that ‘Hurt’
> territory…
> >>
> >> Doug
> >>> On Apr 5, 2017, at 6:56 PM, Robin Hamilton <
> >> [log in to unmask]> wrote:
> >>> I'd keep the tercet form, Bill -- makes it read (nicely) like a mix of
> >> haiku and
> >>> WCW.
> >>>
> >>> Robin
> >>>
> >>>> On 06 April 2017 at 00:49 Bill Wootton <[log in to unmask]>
> >> wrote:
> >>>>
> >>>> Thanks, Sheila, Doug, Pat again. I tried Andrew's suggestion of
> >> abolishing
> >>>> the tercets but still wasn't happy so I've mucked with it again,
> if
> >>>> anybody
> >>>> cares to look. I don't mind being specific about the ghee tin,
> Doug.
> >> It
> >>>> might ring a bell or serve as warning for others. Pat, I was aware
> >> of the
> >>>> song 'Hurt' written by Trent Reznor of Nine Inch Nails and
> covered so
> >>>> memorably by Cash. But in the song, the hurt is deliberate to see
> if
> >> he
> >>>> still feels pain, as I recall.
> >>>>
> >>>> Anyway, last effort for now reads like this, with mainly
> re-ordering
> >>>> changes.
> >>>>
> >>>> Cut
> >>>>
> >>>> I cut myself today.
> >>>> The empty green ghee tin looked useful.
> >>>> Why not rinse it out?
> >>>>
> >>>> Yikes. Surprised by sharp in sink suds.
> >>>> Internal, infernal metal edge.
> >>>> Warm water masked slash to right thumb.
> >>>>
> >>>> Circum-grip withdrawn digit with left hand
> >>>> to stem before it began, the rich red flow.
> >>>> But rupture will not be denied.
> >>>>
> >>>> Pumping out opinions, pounding about,
> >>>> we take intactness so much for granted.
> >>>> Bodies just flesh jackets over blood rivers,
> >>>>
> >>>> always only one breach from gush.
> >>>>
> >>>> bw
> >>>> 6.4.17
> >>>>
> >>>> Bill
> >>>>
> >>>> On Thu, 6 Apr 2017 at 6:40 AM, Douglas Barbour <
> [log in to unmask]
> >>>> wrote:
> >>>>
> >>>>> I like the way it gets to its end Bill, but not sure you need to
> >>>>> identify
> >>>>> that tin, which meant nothing to me (or maybe anyone not Aussie?)…
> >>>>>
> >>>>> Doug
> >>>>>> On Apr 5, 2017, at 12:48 PM, Patrick McManus <
> >>>>> [log in to unmask]> wrote:
> >>>>>> Hi Bill just remembered what your first line reminded of -'I hurt
> >>>>>> myself
> >>>>> today' great Johnny cash song (written by someone else
> >>>>>> cheers Patrick
> >>>>>>
> >>>>>>
> >>>>>>
> >>>>>> -------- Forwarded Message --------
> >>>>>> Subject: Re: Cut
> >>>>>> Date: Wed, 5 Apr 2017 08:16:18 +0100
> >>>>>> From: Patrick McManus <[log in to unmask]>
> >>>>>> To: Poetryetc: poetry and poetics <[log in to unmask]>
> >>>>>>
> >>>>>>
> >>>>>>
> >>>>>> Hi Bill thanks the perils of washing up and pouring out opinions -my
> >>>>> shed is full of maybe useful jars and tins
> >>>>>>
> >>>>>> On 04/04/2017 23:37, Bill Wootton wrote:
> >>>>>>> I cut myself today
> >>>>>>> Surprised by sharp
> >>>>>>> in sink suds
> >>>>>>>
> >>>>>>> The green ghee tin
> >>>>>>> looked useful
> >>>>>>> Why not wash it out
> >>>>>>>
> >>>>>>> Warm water masked
> >>>>>>> the slash to right thumb
> >>>>>>> Infernal internal metal edge
> >>>>>>>
> >>>>>>> Quick withdrawal
> >>>>>>> Circumgrip with left hand
> >>>>>>> to stem before it began
> >>>>>>>
> >>>>>>> the rich red flow
> >>>>>>> But rupture will not
> >>>>>>> be denied its outflow
> >>>>>>>
> >>>>>>> All of us, pumping out
> >>>>>>> opinions, pounding about,
> >>>>>>> only so many blood rivers
> >>>>>>>
> >>>>>>> and sub-rivers,
> >>>>>>> one breach from
> >>>>>>> clearing out.
> >>>>>>>
> >>>>>>> bw
> >>>>> Douglas Barbour
> >>>>> [log in to unmask]
> >>>>> https://eclecticruckus.wordpress.com/
> >>>>>
> >>>>> Recent publications: (With Sheila E Murphy) Continuations &
> >>>>> Continuations
> >>>>> 2 (UofAPress).
> >>>>> Recording Dates (Rubicon Press).
> >>>>> Listen. If (UofAPress):
> >>>>>
> >>>>> and as you read
> >>>>> the sea is turning its dark pages
> >>>>> turning
> >>>>> its dark pages.
> >>>>>
> >>>>> Denise Levertov
> >>>>>
> >> Douglas Barbour
> >> [log in to unmask]
> >> https://eclecticruckus.wordpress.com/
> >>
> >> Recent publications: (With Sheila E Murphy) Continuations &
> Continuations
> >> 2 (UofAPress).
> >> Recording Dates (Rubicon Press).
> >> Listen. If (UofAPress):
> >>
> >>
> >> and as you read
> >> the sea is turning its dark pages
> >> turning
> >> its dark pages.
> >>
> >> Denise Levertov
> >>
>
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