Andrew best of luck with the mend -P
On 06/10/2016 01:15, Andrew Burke wrote:
> Thanks, all. I will approach it with a cold eye in days to come. (I'm out
> of hospital and on the mend.)
>
> Andrew
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> On 6 October 2016 at 02:10, Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
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>> Agree with Bill, not least on your recovery (& Banjo’s), Andrew.
>>
>> But it seems to me that some trimming will help throughout. And check
>> whether you want caps or not at the beginning of all lines, as it’s not
>> clear now. I do like that final image.
>>
>> Doug
>>> On Oct 5, 2016, at 4:06 AM, Andrew Burke <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>>>
>>> Thanks, Bill - thanks, Patrick. Still working on it!
>> Douglas Barbour
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>> https://eclecticruckus.wordpress.com/
>>
>> Recent publications: (With Sheila E Murphy) Continuations & Continuations
>> 2 (UofAPress).
>> Recording Dates (Rubicon Press).
>>
>> Four or five couplets trying to dance
>> into Persia. Who dances in Persia now?
>>
>> A magic carpet, a prayer mat, red.
>> A knocked off head of somebody on her broken knees.
>>
>> Phyllis Webb
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