Excellent, John. Captures the T one's rippling effect perfectly. Only
suggestion you might consider: removing all those ises and ares. so Snakes
hide ... etc but you may feel all those participles gather their own
momentum.
Bill
On Wednesday, 30 March 2016, [log in to unmask] <
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> Patrick,
>
> I thought you might like mine on the same subject.
>
> suggestions for improvement always welcome.
>
> Hair Raising Happenings
>
>
> Snakes are hiding in holes
> the coyotes are howling
> buffalo stampeding.
>
> Rats are running to Mexico
> while they still can.
> Elephants are
> trumpeting
> Donkeys are braying
> Wall street is bricking it.
> Las Vegas is
> turning out the lights,
> Old Faithful has failed
> the fault is slipping
>
> tremors are felt across the land.
> Mount Rushmore crumbles
> in shame.
>
> The bugle has sounded.
>
> The world looks on laughing,
> looks on in
> bewilderment,
> looks on in horror and fear.
>
>
>
> John.
>
> >----Original
> Message----
> >From: [log in to unmask] <javascript:;>
> >Date: 30/03/2016 7:
> 57
> >To: <[log in to unmask] <javascript:;>>
> >Subj: pat snap 732? _-*-__-*-__-*-
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> >
> >Word
> >
> >in a
> >nightmare
> >in a
> >darkened
>
> >greying world
> >as he
> >crouched
> >cowered
> >in fear
> >he realised
> >that
> the
> >word trump
> >would never
> >mean the
> >same again
> >
> >
> >pmcmanus
>
> >r953
> >
> >an extra!
> >
> >X
> >
> >Sadly
> >His polter
> >Had geisted
> >
> >
> >pmcmanus
>
> >r947
> >
>
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