Thanks, Andrew. Sometimes I find my poems are just truncated sentences so
I'm not careful enough to compress.
Bill
On Wednesday, 3 February 2016, Andrew Burke <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> Yes, like the alternative better. That's my vote.
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> On 3 February 2016 at 10:03, Bill Wootton <[log in to unmask]
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> > She sits skewiff,
> > one leg shooting
> > out to shore break,
> > the other splayed
> > sandwards.
> >
> > Played-out waves
> > encircle her,
> > an island of slump,
> > around which
> > beach strollers divert.
> >
> > They can see
> > she's there for
> > the duration.
> > Her firstborn splashes
> > in nearby shallows.
> >
> > Loose top semi-soaked,
> > arms trawling wet
> > sand runnels, facing
> > sun full-on, she
> > radiates surrender.
> >
> > bw
> >
> > Just wondering, is 'around which' a shocker?
> >
> > Could be:
> >
> > Played-out waves
> > encircle her,
> > an island
> > of slump.
> > Beach strollers divert.
> >
> > Thoughts?
> >
> > Bill
> >
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