Thanks Doug.
Bill
On Thursday, 4 February 2016, Bill Wootton <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> Thanks, Doug too. Important that I get that first view across clearly.
> Max, you'll be happy that 'shooting' has bitten the dust. Doug, this final
> version should make it clear where she has propped herself. A full stop has
> re-emerged after line 11 too.
>
> Bill
>
> She sits skewiff,
> one leg plonked
> in the shallows,
> the other splayed
> sandwards.
>
> Played-out waves
> encircle her,
> an island
> of slump.
> Beach strollers
>
> diverge either side.
> They can see she's
> there for the duration.
> Her firstborn splashes
> in nearby shallows.
>
> Loose top semi-soaked,
> arms trawling wet
> sand runnels, facing
> sun full-on, she
> radiates surrender.
>
> bw
>
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