Thanks, Doug.
Yes, I see what you mean. Too much of it's.
I was getting caught up in the sky this week. There'll be a Moon Venus transit this Friday night, here at least - not sure of other latitudes, longitudes, or hemispheres. And being an October kiddy, the Libra rising is of more than passing interest. The stars one was born under are of interest to the non-astrologically inclined as much as others. However, it's not my birthday this week.
Apparently Aurora Australis is also doing its thing at the moment but, sadly, nowhere near South Aus.
Cheers,
Jill
On 08/10/2015, at 4:48 AM, Douglas Barbour wrote:
> I was going to say, from as to as if, that shift, Jill.
>
> I wonder if you can cut a bit in the 2nd stanza, mainly the ‘it’s’ in the 2nd line really, as the rest is so much a art of that shift taking place…
>
> I like where it takes us…
>
> Doug
> On Oct 7, 2015, at 11:42 AM, Sheila Murphy <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>
>> Jill, "as if," indeed. I like this. I like where it appears to come from.
>> It is a evocative of depth.
>>
>> On Wed, Oct 7, 2015 at 8:28 AM, Patrick McManus <
>> [log in to unmask]> wrote:
>>
>>> some-else who has dialogues with machines
>>>
>>> -----Original Message----- From: Jill Jones
>>> Sent: Wednesday, October 7, 2015 10:05 AM
>>> To: [log in to unmask]
>>> Subject: A Rising Snap
>>>
>>> A Rising
>>>
>>>
>>>
>>> the sky’s getting close to Libra rising
>>>
>>> it doesn’t seem to have anything to do with balance or beauty
>>>
>>> is it a hustle, or a joke
>>>
>>> some kind of maintenance of the mundane
>>>
>>> another lie like any other lie
>>>
>>> whatever refusal or dance is needed
>>>
>>> as the wind suddenly turns into rain
>>>
>>> then just as suddenly subsides
>>>
>>> as necessity leads nowhere
>>>
>>> as effects are simply effects rather than evidence
>>>
>>> or a lead-in to an argument that might become reason
>>>
>>>
>>>
>>> the fridge hums
>>>
>>> it’s not mimicking the brief rain, it’s a machine
>>>
>>> but for a moment it almost sounds like
>>>
>>> a comrade, like a passing train
>>>
>>> or tinnitus, blood, a pen writing across a page
>>>
>>> any sound you could befriend
>>>
>>> anything that sounds like some dialogue
>>>
>>> you imagined when you imagined
>>>
>>> walking out into the world
>>>
>>>
>>>
>>> as if there were people
>>>
>>> as if trees grew out of deliberate earth
>>>
>>> and as if there was such a thing as singing
>
> Douglas Barbour
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> Recent publications: (With Sheila E Murphy) Continuations & Continuation 2 (UofAPress).
> Recording Dates (Rubicon Press).
>
> Done in by creation itself.
>
> I mean the gods. Not us. Well us too.
> The gods moved into books. Who wrote the books?
> We wrote the books. In whose dream, then are we dreaming?
>
> Robert Kroetsch.
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