Thanks Andrew. I see your point. Will do.
Bill
> On 2 Jul 2015, at 3:46 pm, Andrew Burke <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>
> a mini-narrative in a tight form. The first line is a different kind of
> register than the rest - the 'study' carries so many possibilities it is
> not anchored like the rest of the words. But I urge you to write it again
> with a change in that area - it's a little gem.
>
> Could be part of a verse novella :-)
>
>
> Andrew
>
>> On 2 July 2015 at 09:37, Bill Wootton <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>>
>> Fair enough, Doug. The poem was suggested by my current reading of H H
>> Richardson's The Fortunes of Richard Mahoney, where I encountered the
>> expression 'fell into a brown study' and loved it. Kind of recognised it
>> and challenged myself to begin a poem with the expression, even if I dos
>> tweak it a little. Glad you liked the ending which just kind of fell out.
>>
>> Max, you of course fall into desks I see this week, of any colour you
>> like, or rather others fall into studies in whatever room of the house.
>>
>> I'm wearing a brown jumper this morning. Will this affect my mood?
>>
>> Bill
>>
>>> On 2 Jul 2015, at 7:38 am, Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>>>
>>> Perhaps my unsure response is exactly what you wanted this to ensure,
>> Bill. I think the final couplet works well,but al not sure of the first…
>>>
>>> Doug
>>>> On Jun 30, 2015, at 4:22 PM, Bill Wootton <[log in to unmask]>
>> wrote:
>>>>
>>>> Into a brown study
>>>> Herbert collapsed
>>>>
>>>> Jennifer had lied
>>>> again
>>>>
>>>> He hated
>>>> catching her out
>>>>
>>>> But could no more
>>>> stop his checking
>>>>
>>>> than cleanse him
>>>> self without soap
>>>>
>>>> bw
>>>
>>> Douglas Barbour
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>>>
>>> Recent publications: (With Sheila E Murphy) Continuations & Continuation
>> 2 (UofAPress).
>>> Recording Dates (Rubicon Press).
>>>
>>> Done in by creation itself.
>>>
>>> I mean the gods. Not us. Well us too.
>>> The gods moved into books. Who wrote the books?
>>> We wrote the books. In whose dream, then are we dreaming?
>>>
>>> Robert Kroetsch.
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