I guess you'd signalled the cliches in your comment underneath, then over-turned them. So, a strategy (?) I was presuming. As the cliche was so over-the-top (and how many mirrors these days are fly-blown and fully cracked, I wonder - foxed, maybe, toothpaste spattered, and chipped at some edges, plenty of those I'd guess - hmm, best I go clean mine) it was clearly parody, to my simple mind anyway.
On 23/07/2015, at 4:43 PM, Patrick McManus wrote:
> Jill cheers -trying to be playful :-) leading up a garden clichéd path!!
> -interesting no-one objected to clichés of
>> fly specked
>> cracked mirror
>> with it's harsh
>> bright neon
>> overhead light
>
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> Thanks, Patrick. Definitely, there's a lot of 'facing soon'. And, yes,
> 'terrific' it looks.
>
> Cheers,
> Jill
>
> On 22/07/2015, at 6:05 PM, Patrick McManus wrote:
>
>> LOOK
>>
>> that cold
>> bleak morning
>> facing soon
>> becoming an
>> octogenarian
>> he took
>> a long hard
>> critical look
>> at himself
>> in the cruel
>> unforgiving
>> fly specked
>> cracked mirror
>> with it's harsh
>> bright neon
>> overhead light
>> and was forced
>> reluctantly
>> to admit
>> how really
>> absolutely
>> terrific he
>> looked
>>
>>
>> pmcmanus
>> r814
>> I rather enjoyed using the clichés here -do they work?
>> then giving unexpected finish :-)
>>
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