Hi L.
Like the sense of observed life in decay here. Couple of things: do you need 'maybe' to finish line 3? And to what does 'it's' refer in line 7? The moon? The gull? Last three lines full of engaging entanglements.
B
> On 13 May 2015, at 4:19 pm, Lawrence Upton <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
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> you'll see sometimes an old or infirm gull,
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> a bit grubby, long since less than ebullient,
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> limping in a length of fishing line maybe --
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> that's how their seasons end, rapidly slowing
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> towards the speed of stone; still in motion;
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> the swaying moon glides on, turning, vacuous;
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> it's a hobbled chunk of an avalanche
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> banging towards the big emptiness, opening
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> it for rock to fly in tethering circles
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> of curves; parabolas; and springs of straightness
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> through meshwork of nested slingshots; tangled?
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