Well, i said 'inspirational sounding', Max. This speaker sounds energised, I didn't say rational, what with the odd climate change comments. It might be rearranged, I see, to finish with the opening stanza. Otherwise, the point of view is shot and the speaker's capability to continue clearing out.
Bill
On 12/02/2015, at 3:54 PM, Max Richards wrote:
> Gosh, Bill, that intuition of yours takes me by surprise.
>
> I knew I was having trouble with tone - the first part began at a moment of feeling a superfluous old codger myself!
>
> gradually it seemed to need a counterweight and actuallyI hoped for the new man to sound something of a poseur!
> admire him and you expose your prejudicial assumptions!
>
> But it got out of control, and the climate change stuff seems to get in the way.
> Out of my fumbling hands!
>
> best from Max
>>
>> Bill
>>
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>>> On 12 Feb 2015, at 4:47 am, Max Richards <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>>>
>>> Deletion
>>>
>>> And so between inbox
>>> and outbox he lived his life,
>>> hovering over Save and Send.
>>> Now he has deleted himself -
>>> Delete All - a fitting end.
>>>
>>> Therefore - clear out the attic
>>> clear out the cellar
>>> clear out everything between -
>>> the greybeard’s gone
>>> nowhere to be seen.
>>>
>>> No way he’ll ever
>>> be back - good riddance
>>> to the septic sceptic. Denier
>>> not of climate change
>>> but that it’s man-made.
>>>
>>> Deodorise disinfect
>>> decontaminate.
>>> Welcome the clean new tenant
>>> to the cleared space,
>>> the fresh air, hygienic emptiness,
>>>
>>> the new broom, the unspoiled
>>> spontaneous innocence.
>>> Straight? - unbending.
>>> Clean-shaven? - beardless.
>>> Uncreased by laughing,
>>>
>>> suffering, experience.
>>> Smooth hopefulness,
>>> environmental activist
>>> anti-sentimentalist,
>>> his files in the Cloud.
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