Thanks Patrick (for that comment) & thanks everyone.
Bill: I thought about that, but when I added that first line, it felt right to let it be an & (or and) situation…
Doug
On Jan 29, 2015, at 2:23 AM, Patrick McManus <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> Bill it reads differently for me without the ampersand -but personally I
> would prfer just 'and' also it relates nicely to the second verse -but what
> do I know anyway -now to attempt to disconnect my ancient washine? Washing !
> machine
> P battling on
>
> -----Original Message-----
> From: Poetryetc: poetry and poetics [mailto:[log in to unmask]] On
> Behalf Of Bill Wootton
> Sent: 29 January 2015 06:55
> To: [log in to unmask]
> Subject: Re: snap 28/01/15
>
> Neat, Doug. Is the ampersand necessary?
>
> Bill
>
>
>> On 29 Jan 2015, at 7:19 am, Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>>
>> a casual glance &
>> caught under
>> the incandescents
>>
>> her long hair shifts
>> shadow lines flow
>> up & down the compacted strands
>>
>> Douglas Barbour
>> [log in to unmask]
>>
>> Recent publications: (With Sheila E Murphy) Continuations & Continuation 2
> (UofAPress).
>> Recording Dates (Rubicon Press).
>>
>> that we are only
>> as we find out we are
>>
>> Charles Olson
>>
>
Douglas Barbour
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Recent publications: (With Sheila E Murphy) Continuations & Continuation 2 (UofAPress).
Recording Dates (Rubicon Press).
that we are only
as we find out we are
Charles Olson
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