Agree with Sheila. And the way it moves to that ending, in the air.
J
________________________Jill Jones www.jilljones.com.au
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I hear this vividly, Lawrence. It is highly charged. The visual
enters the
auditory in a way that resonates.
On Wed, Nov 5, 2014 at 3:53 AM, Lawrence Upton
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> prewar material; cut to
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> camera lens, curling at the edges,
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> one tower above many antennae,
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> weapon barrels
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> a shallow rise out of straight, slow climbing curves
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> returning to straight
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> a raised eye brow
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> back of my hand
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> Tall poles set in heath.
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> A monkey up a pole gesticulating
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> with one upstretched arm.
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> It is dressed in a rhinestone suit.
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> Sunset in one hour and a half.
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> Sleet falling in shining air.
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