I didn't get this and when I saw the comments waited for the original for
some reason.
Well, yes, jolly good but why whiteR
whiter than what?
Lg
On 20 November 2014 16:37, Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> Thanks, everyone. Actually put it together in my head while driving
> across our river valley. Only discovered the syllables later, & so could
> drop the 'the' though I liked its repetition in the line...
>
> Yeah: first line cliché but as it was...
>
> Anyway, as seen...
>
> Doug
> On Nov 20, 2014, at 4:42 AM, Patrick McManus <
> [log in to unmask]> wrote:
>
> > Thanks Doug for me the cliché of the early morning sun -is set off well
> in
> > the next two lines (but what do I know!!)
> > Earlyish morning sun here -but getting nippyer!
> >
> > -----Original Message-----
> > From: Poetryetc: poetry and poetics [mailto:[log in to unmask]] On
> > Behalf Of Bill Wootton
> > Sent: 20 November 2014 04:55
> > To: [log in to unmask]
> > Subject: Re: haikusnap
> >
> > Either way, Doug, the glisten is got.
> >
> > Bill
> >
> >
> >> On 20 Nov 2014, at 2:14 pm, Andrew Burke <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> >>
> >> Chuck the 'the' out. No need to be a slave to the count.
> >>
> >> Andrew
> >>
> >>> On 20 November 2014 10:32, Sheila Murphy <[log in to unmask]>
> wrote:
> >>>
> >>> Lovely, Doug. I feel it, even hear the visual.
> >>>
> >>> On Wed, Nov 19, 2014 at 4:26 PM, Douglas Barbour <[log in to unmask]
> >
> >>> wrote:
> >>>
> >>>> early morning sun
> >>>> whiter shading against blue
> >>>> the thin trees glisten
> >>>>
> >>>>
> >>>> Douglas Barbour
> >>>> [log in to unmask]
> >>>>
> >>>> Recent publications: (With Sheila E Murphy) Continuations &
> Continuation
> >>> 2
> >>>> (UofAPress).
> >>>> Recording Dates (Rubicon Press).
> >>>>
> >>>> that we are only
> >>>> as we find out we are
> >>>>
> >>>> Charles Olson
> >>
> >>
> >>
> >> --
> >> Andrew
> >> http://hispirits.blogspot.com/
> >> 'Undercover of Lightness'
> >> http://walleahpress.com.au/recent-publications.html
> >> 'Shikibu Shuffle'
> >>
> >
> http://abovegroundpress.blogspot.com.au/2012/03/new-from-aboveground-press-s
> > hikibu.html
> >>
> >
>
> Douglas Barbour
> [log in to unmask]
>
> Recent publications: (With Sheila E Murphy) Continuations & Continuation 2
> (UofAPress).
> Recording Dates (Rubicon Press).
>
> that we are only
> as we find out we are
>
> Charles Olson
>
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