Thanks Jill. Mystery marches on.
Bill
> On 2 Oct 2014, at 6:24 pm, Jill Jones <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>
> I liked this, Bill. I more-or-less got the context, at least with the
> canoe, shells, etc. I like the sense of a narrative in steps you have
> to piece together. I'd stick with the idea, even if you play with it a
> bit. Nothing wrong with a bit of mystery.
> Jill
> ________________________Jill Jones www.jilljones.com.au
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> Sent:Thu, 2 Oct 2014 06:49:03 +1000
> Subject:Re: Timing
>
> Bit of an experiment, Doug. All the odd sentences in the first four
> stanzas tell a fishing story a friend related while living with
> Aborigines in the Gulf of Carpentaria, doing drilling, and being
> invited to sheir their ways sometimes The even sentences relate
> another friend's recent experience with his dying mother, birthing
> daughter. The final stanza tries to further conflate the two disparate
> stories a litle. Burdens, bailing. bit of a stretch I know.
>
> Bill
>
>> On 2 Oct 2014, at 3:46 am, Douglas Barbour wrote:
>>
>> The declarative sentences carry a certain weight Bill. But I
> don’t quite get the context: is this a bit of ethnological study,
> or…?
>>
>> Doug
>>> On Sep 30, 2014, at 5:46 AM, Bill Wootton wrote:
>>>
>>> The kids all carried large open shells.
>>> His mother died the day before.
>>> The Papuan bark boat leaked.
>>>
>>> Today his daughter had a baby girl.
>>> He stood up in the front of the boat.
>>> Yesterday he told his mother the girl was born.
>>>
>>> The kids bailed like buggery with the shells.
>>> He told his mother they'd named her Ada.
>>> He shafted the fish and hauled it in.
>>>
>>> He told his mother Ada was named after her.
>>> Each fresh fish roiled on the boat bottom.
>>> This morning they named the girl Indiana.
>>>
>>> The boat lay heavier in the water.
>>> The kids bailed harder.
>>> They turned for shore.
>>>
>>> bw
>>> 21.9.14
>>
>> Douglas Barbour
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>> Recent publications: (With Sheila E Murphy) Continuations &
> Continuation 2 (UofAPress).
>> Recording Dates (Rubicon Press).
>>
>> that we are only
>> as we find out we are
>>
>> Charles Olson
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