You probably don't need to (look), Sheila. Not that you need to 'explain', I just wondered whether the lake was the colour (of) snow or the colour, generally, was snow or something else I am missing. Anyway, the parting comes across so well.
Bill
> On 28 Oct 2014, at 6:35 pm, Sheila Murphy <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
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> Thank you, Bill. I will take a look at this!
>> On Oct 28, 2014 12:33 AM, "Bill Wootton" <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
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>> Like the gentle, nostalgic feel, Sheila, esp stanzas 1, 3, 4. Line 5 for
>> me, however, confounds. Perhaps it's just a punctuation thing?
>>
>> Bill
>>
>>
>>>> On 28 Oct 2014, at 12:35 pm, Sheila Murphy <[log in to unmask]>
>>> wrote:
>>>
>>> A spindly and
>>> transparent winter
>>> parts from
>>>
>>> lake
>>> the color snow,
>>> foreground
>>>
>>> of sticks
>>> alongside
>>> evening's pale
>>>
>>> sky parted
>>> from shared
>>> place.
>>>
>>> Sheila E. Murphy
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