I liked the way bit was used at the end because to me it showed nicely the
'cool' of the ducks
Cheers unca P
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From: Poetryetc: poetry and poetics [mailto:[log in to unmask]] On
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Sent: 07 January 2014 20:02
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Subject: Re: ducks
I thought "reaching" was "reading", and was delighted. It's a delightful
moment in general. "... a bit" at the end is flaccid, but otherwise this is
vivid.
KS
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On 7 January 2014 20:40, Lawrence Upton <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> If it weren't for the stuffing and roasting and having your eggs
> nicked I wouldnt mind being a duck. Better than a chicken.
> A very big duck.
> Like the ten foot parrot who says: Whose a pretty boy?
> I wonder if anyone knows a story by Herbert George Wells -- Aepyornis
> Island
>
> Must go
> thanks, Patrick
>
> L
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> On 7 January 2014 18:36, Patrick McManus
> <[log in to unmask]
> >wrote:
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> > L enjoyed that the Ducks just moved away a bit!
> > P paddling fast
> >
> > -----Original Message-----
> > From: Poetryetc: poetry and poetics
> > [mailto:[log in to unmask]] On Behalf Of Lawrence Upton
> > Sent: 07 January 2014 18:09
> > To: [log in to unmask]
> > Subject: ducks
> >
> > Ducks toil upon a calm ocean,
> >
> > working to stay in place; even
> >
> > veering, apparently serene,
> >
> >
> >
> > their paddling feet invisible,
> >
> > as the dog approaches, reaching
> >
> > some tidally-exposed boulders,
> >
> >
> >
> > clambering with loud snorts, panting.
> >
> > Gulls hang on almost till the last,
> >
> > then wheel and screech down at her back.
> >
> >
> >
> > Noisy fish break through the water.
> >
> > The ducks keep churning the water
> >
> > although moving away a bit.
> >
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> >
> > Richard Kessling / Lawrence Upton
> >
>
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