'questioning' can stay or go, depending, i guess.
But 'when he dear' ?
Always get a return ticket, though...
Doug
On Jan 15, 2014, at 4:13 AM, Patrick McManus <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> Hi Bill hot out your way!!
> cheers thanks for comment much appreciated rather liked the questioning
> pause pointing out as part of their confusion -will reread!!
> Once again some else has got my snap but it has not arrived here to the
> great sadness of an elderly person
>
> -----Original Message-----
> From: Poetryetc: poetry and poetics [mailto:[log in to unmask]] On
> Behalf Of Bill Wootton
> Sent: 15 January 2014 11:04
> To: [log in to unmask]
> Subject: Re: pat snaps 610 _->^<-_
>
> Pat you could leave out the word/line 'questioning' and do no damage to the
> poem. Not sure how much damage granddad suffered.
>
> Bill
>
>> On 15 Jan 2014, at 9:27 pm, Patrick McManus
> <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>>
>> TRIP
>>
>> when he dear
>> old granddad
>> booked a trip
>> to Switzerland
>> to Dignitas
>> nobody
>> in the family
>> felt up to
>> questioning
>> pointing out
>> that he had
>> bought a
>> return ticket
>>
>>
>> pmcmanus
>> r433
>> Wednesday, 15 January 2014
>>
>
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