Dear L ducks at least it worked for me cheers P humbly
-----Original Message-----
From: Poetryetc: poetry and poetics [mailto:[log in to unmask]] On
Behalf Of Lawrence Upton
Sent: 08 January 2014 15:04
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Subject: Re: ducks
That's what I was aiming for. I don't think it worked
L
On 8 January 2014 08:42, Patrick McManus
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> I liked the way bit was used at the end because to me it showed nicely
> the 'cool' of the ducks Cheers unca P
>
> -----Original Message-----
> From: Poetryetc: poetry and poetics [mailto:[log in to unmask]]
> On Behalf Of Kasper Salonen
> Sent: 07 January 2014 20:02
> To: [log in to unmask]
> Subject: Re: ducks
>
> I thought "reaching" was "reading", and was delighted. It's a
> delightful moment in general. "... a bit" at the end is flaccid, but
> otherwise this is vivid.
>
> KS
>
> ---
> Kasper Salonen, toiminnanjohtaja
> Helsinki Poetry Connection
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>
>
> On 7 January 2014 20:40, Lawrence Upton <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
>
> > If it weren't for the stuffing and roasting and having your eggs
> > nicked I wouldnt mind being a duck. Better than a chicken.
> > A very big duck.
> > Like the ten foot parrot who says: Whose a pretty boy?
> > I wonder if anyone knows a story by Herbert George Wells --
> > Aepyornis Island
> >
> > Must go
> > thanks, Patrick
> >
> > L
> >
> >
> >
> >
> > On 7 January 2014 18:36, Patrick McManus
> > <[log in to unmask]
> > >wrote:
> >
> > > L enjoyed that the Ducks just moved away a bit!
> > > P paddling fast
> > >
> > > -----Original Message-----
> > > From: Poetryetc: poetry and poetics
> > > [mailto:[log in to unmask]] On Behalf Of Lawrence Upton
> > > Sent: 07 January 2014 18:09
> > > To: [log in to unmask]
> > > Subject: ducks
> > >
> > > Ducks toil upon a calm ocean,
> > >
> > > working to stay in place; even
> > >
> > > veering, apparently serene,
> > >
> > >
> > >
> > > their paddling feet invisible,
> > >
> > > as the dog approaches, reaching
> > >
> > > some tidally-exposed boulders,
> > >
> > >
> > >
> > > clambering with loud snorts, panting.
> > >
> > > Gulls hang on almost till the last,
> > >
> > > then wheel and screech down at her back.
> > >
> > >
> > >
> > > Noisy fish break through the water.
> > >
> > > The ducks keep churning the water
> > >
> > > although moving away a bit.
> > >
> > >
> > >
> > >
> > >
> > >
> > >
> > > Richard Kessling / Lawrence Upton
> > >
> >
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