I agree with you though just dropping def articles is not necessarily the
answer, though it is the answer to other things
Ta to you and all for comments
To you particularly I recommend a green carpet
L
On 7 January 2014 21:01, Bill Wootton <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> I like the representation of the two-paced ducks too, L. All that effort
> to appear calm. Final stanza appears to still need work. Would you consider
> removing your definite articles? Final line could be sharpened especially.
>
> Thing about ducks is I love to see them arrive on our dam but I know to
> expect weeks of green duck poo to scrape from the bottoms of my shoes
> before the carpet gets it.
>
> B
>
> > On 8 Jan 2014, at 5:40 am, Lawrence Upton <[log in to unmask]>
> wrote:
> >
> > If it weren't for the stuffing and roasting and having your eggs nicked I
> > wouldnt mind being a duck. Better than a chicken.
> > A very big duck.
> > Like the ten foot parrot who says: Whose a pretty boy?
> > I wonder if anyone knows a story by Herbert George Wells -- Aepyornis
> Island
> >
> > Must go
> > thanks, Patrick
> >
> > L
> >
> >
> >
> >
> > On 7 January 2014 18:36, Patrick McManus <[log in to unmask]
> >wrote:
> >
> >> L enjoyed that the Ducks just moved away a bit!
> >> P paddling fast
> >>
> >> -----Original Message-----
> >> From: Poetryetc: poetry and poetics [mailto:[log in to unmask]]
> On
> >> Behalf Of Lawrence Upton
> >> Sent: 07 January 2014 18:09
> >> To: [log in to unmask]
> >> Subject: ducks
> >>
> >> Ducks toil upon a calm ocean,
> >>
> >> working to stay in place; even
> >>
> >> veering, apparently serene,
> >>
> >>
> >>
> >> their paddling feet invisible,
> >>
> >> as the dog approaches, reaching
> >>
> >> some tidally-exposed boulders,
> >>
> >>
> >>
> >> clambering with loud snorts, panting.
> >>
> >> Gulls hang on almost till the last,
> >>
> >> then wheel and screech down at her back.
> >>
> >>
> >>
> >> Noisy fish break through the water.
> >>
> >> The ducks keep churning the water
> >>
> >> although moving away a bit.
> >>
> >>
> >>
> >>
> >>
> >>
> >>
> >> Richard Kessling / Lawrence Upton
> >
>
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