Ta
Rightly or wrongly, while / whilst is deliberate. I'll confer with my
collaborator
L
On 9 January 2014 21:50, Bill Wootton <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
> Like the long neck's reach, L. Not sure of that whilst sitting under
> while. Good to see you taking the bit (between your teeth?)
>
> B
>
> > On 10 Jan 2014, at 7:17 am, Patrick McManus <
> [log in to unmask]> wrote:
> >
> > Watch out for long necked dogs!! Beyond long neck's reach??
> >
> > -----Original Message-----
> > From: Poetryetc: poetry and poetics [mailto:[log in to unmask]] On
> > Behalf Of Lawrence Upton
> > Sent: 09 January 2014 18:27
> > To: [log in to unmask]
> > Subject: revised poem,ta to all
> >
> > Ducks toil upon a calm ocean,
> >
> > working to stay in place; backing,
> >
> > veering, apparently serene,
> >
> >
> >
> > their paddling feet invisible,
> >
> > as the dog approaches, reaching
> >
> > some tidally-exposed boulders,
> >
> >
> >
> > clambering its loud snorts, panting.
> >
> > Gulls hang on almost till the last,
> >
> > then wheel and screech above her back
> >
> >
> >
> > while noisy fish smash through water.
> >
> > whilst ducks churn it, although taking
> >
> > themselves only a long neck's reach.
> >
> >
> >
> > Richard Kessling / Lawrence Upton
> >
>
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