Well, one straightahead way, Max, would be to have your present ruminations all in present tense and the memories in the past. But it could work to have it all in past tense. The dim distant past and the recent past of the night where words were grasped and flew. No models spring to mind yet.
Bill
On 14/11/2013, at 6:31 AM, Max Richards wrote:
> thanks Bill and Doug, especially.
> Does the advice point to present tense throughout or past throughout?
> Is there a model I can work to?
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> Max
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>> I like it & the final few stanzas, as others have said, Max.
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>> The loss of words with the discovery of memory anyway...
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>> But I think you need to check your tenses & get them straighter throughout?
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>> Doug
>> On Nov 12, 2013, at 3:55 PM, Max Richards <[log in to unmask]> wrote:
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>>> Glamour in Plaits, 1947
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